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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product

#people #business #product
I
belive
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 that, Production of an exclusive
product
 to make a huge impact and
success
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 business in the world. mainly
i
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 would like to point in
this
 essay, business with
an
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 unique
product
 can easy
manufactre
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manufacture
 and would not need any
muntiple
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multiple
equipments
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 or
large
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a large
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 number of
man power
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.
also
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 its can be very space consuming rather than many products. look at the upgradation.
simple
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product
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products
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 can very handy to
undgrade
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upgrade
. for
examble
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 poul pen enhance every year according to the new
genarations
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generations
generation
.
neveetheless
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nevertheless
,
ads
 can
be influence
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the
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society
therefore
 to focus the
ads
for
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 only one
product
 rather than many
product
ads
.
its
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it's
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 easy for the community to identify the manufacture in the market.
additionally
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 one
product
its
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it's
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 a huge money save for entrepreneurs. for the
illustatrion
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illustration
indian
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 territory community
are rely
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 on
ads
at
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the
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apply
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social media, tv and
other
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others
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. to conclude unique
product
 much rapid benefit to a growing
bubsiness
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business
 person
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