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People think children should attend extra classes after school, while others disagree. Discuss both opinions ad give your own view.

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In
this
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 competitive environment, each and every individual is
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 a race to be on the top. Not only employees, sportsmen or businessmen,
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but even students are also
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students
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 are a part of it. Some parents and guardians are leaning towards an approach to keep their kids mentally and academically intelligent. For the same,
students
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 are showed to attend extra coaching apart from
school
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 hours.
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, there are few people who oppose
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 children beyond their capacity to study. Both
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aspects
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its
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 own positive as well as negative sides.
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 with, extra classes keep
students
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 ahead in
studies
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 going in
school
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.
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, even if a student is left out on any part of a syllabus, additional coaching helps them to cope up with that. Coaching
centers
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 take regular tests which is beneficial for learners to maintain their academic scores. After
schooling
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 hours, homework and revision in
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a crucial
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part
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 of
studies
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, many
students
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 fail to do that on
day-to-day
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 basis which leads to a gradual decline in their marks. Nowadays, most parents are earners and due to
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 it is an arduous job for them to make sure their kid is up to date with
studies
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.
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, few individuals do not want to force their kids to study
post schooling
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 hours. Considering that,
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 they should make their child participate in additional activities.
Extra
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 curriculum is equally vital in
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 age. If an individual is not physically active, only academic knowledge is not worth counting. Many children are intelligent in
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however
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 they lack in terms of general knowledge and sports. For getting employed in renowned organisations, academic as well as extra curriculum is taken
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 consideration.
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, after
school
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 pupil needs stress buster and for
that
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 they need to be engaged in other activities as well. It will boost their confidence and social skills too. To conclude, extra coaching after
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 is a necessity
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 during
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 learning curve extra activities shouldn't be ignored.
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 management,
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 and fun together
is
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 effortless.
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