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Some people think that universities should assign students to share dormitory rooms. Others think that students should be able to choose their roommates on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Past decade earth changed evolved so much.Even in education
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 as youngsters take there schooling in locally but nowadays folk travel through other countries to study.
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 comes with the problem junior want to choose their roommates but
universities
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 assign their rooms.
This
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 essay will discuss both views.
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 foremost, having a roommate is
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 a family maybe even more.When
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 just randomly chose their
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 not showing their interest usually won't fit.As a ,
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 it will be difficult to focus on their study and fail their exams.On the other ,handpicking who compatible their personality or interest student degree, a grade will increase and focus on their projects even more.,
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 youngsters will socialize even more which means it has so many beneficial things.
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, It will take so much time to wait to pick their
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.These days
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students
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 number increased so much, especially international
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 approximately 1 thousand to 10 thousand.It will so long for wait 1 thousand people their decisions.After taking all people in result they need to analyze it because some the people may be chosen by 2 persons
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universities
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 ask their person to
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 his idea and demanding work.
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,
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 had so many things to other than
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 as planing semester and teachers,
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 allocation. In conclusion,it will take time to for
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 their
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 and difficult to analyze their roommates.
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 it may be complicated, it has so many benefits to their grades, the project even their social skills.,
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Personally
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 I am one of the
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 it is hard to deal with who has own different interest or personality and wish
universities
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 give opportunities to choose our
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 it would be awesome.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • assign
  • diverse range
  • social segregation
  • pre-existing friendships
  • shared interests
  • harmonious living environment
  • compatible
  • potential conflicts
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • invaluable life skills
  • personal satisfaction
  • autonomy
  • responsibility
  • sense of agency
  • balance
  • preferences
  • criteria
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