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Many school children today take part in work experience sessions for short periods of time instead of attending school is this a positive or a negative development

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It has been very popular to join the
work
experience
 sessions.
Children
absences
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 school and take part in
work
. Some people might think attending school is better rather than having
work
experience
. One of the reasons for
this
 is that
children
 lose their time
to study
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studying
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. To have a good future,
children
 have to study hard.
For example
, in
Japan
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,Japan
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 most
of
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the
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apply
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people graduated
college
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from college
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,
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apply
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 because they want to
work
. The system of having a job changed strictly.
That is
 why
,
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apply
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 some people think that attending school is better.
However
,
experience
 is more useful for going out into society. They can learn about customer service, which employees are used to every
jobs
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job
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. Schools would not teach these important things.
In addition
,
children
 will be nervous about future working.
This
 means that they have
a
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 pressure of succeeding at their job. By getting a little
experience
 of what it is like, they can be more relevant for
Also
, the
work
experience
 sessions are just for one week, so it does not make a significant difference.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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