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some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case ? what is the most important thing to succeed in life?

#people #school #life #case
According to Charles Darwin, survival is the fittest,
likewise
, being successful is a matter of concern in the modern era to be fit in society. A prudent person can be successful in
life
 rather than an educated one.
This
 essay will reflect the concept of success, examples and
the
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 significance
of
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it
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in
the
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society.
To begin
 with, acquire knowledge through learning is satisfactory to meet the requirements for jobs and money.
however
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 it is evident that many
of
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the educated people end up in failures in
life
beacause
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because
 of many reasons.
for
example
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 in Indian
business
magnate
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 Anil Ambani didn't succeed in his
business
 even if he had plenty of educational background and family support.
on the other hand
, another
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businessman
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business man
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businessman
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, Mr Baiju, became a millionaire in a couple of years through his
business
 because he implemented prudence in
business
 rather than educated merits and
qualification
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. while supporting the detailed statement, a study conducted in Asia points out that
majority
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 of the successful and rich people are illiterate or less educated.
however
 to acquire success they are appreciable.
Moreover
 to succeed in
life
 depends on many things
such
 as timely usage of cleverness and action plan is mandatory in order to be satisfactory to succeed. for
an
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illustration,
majority
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 of the
sports persons
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sportspersons
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 all over the world are not educated much or they have only preliminary education.
however
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 they gathered success in their career despite
of
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educational support. In conclusion, it is evident that school merits
is
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 not the scale to weigh a person whether he is
succeed
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 or not, whereas common sense, prudence,
life
 experience are the key factors to mitigate the issues to be successful in
life
.
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