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Few of the
stratergies
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strategies
which are being used in promoting their
products
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or services
,
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are considered to be
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in appropriate
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inappropriate
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in the present environment we live in.
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in my opinion
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I agree that few
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advertisements
are unacceptable these days.
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with,
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is impossible to completely ignore advertisements as it plays a major role in our lifestyle, we can see posters when we step outside and even constant advertisements on our phones by using mail,
sms
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SMS
, social media etc as their platforms to establish their
products
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or services.
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,
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the
there
companies before
relweasing
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releasing
a promotional activity should ensure that it follows the guidelines to make the advertisement ethical, but do the companies follow
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? In my point of view, I find the advertisement sometimes inappropriate due to their ways of
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portraying
their
products
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are quite disturbing for the people at present times. Since advertisements are influential the victims are mostly young people and children
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for
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scam as they end up purchasing unwanted goods which leads to unhealthy buying
habbits
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habits
.
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addition
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tobacco
products
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and
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alcohol
products
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has
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always been a bad influence for decades now. But, the
promotinal
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promotional
activities for cigarettes have significantly dropped down in the
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few years, to which we must thank the health care
campeigns
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campaigns
being conducted.
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to sum up, some methods adopted by companies for their
promotinal
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promotional
actrivities
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activities
are considered to be morally wrong as they lead to purchasing
unnecessay
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unnecessary
products
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whic
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which
are not needed or too expensive or even unhealthy food habits which will have a negative impact on their life in the future.
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