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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #guarantees #people #job
Few of the
stratergies
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strategies
 which are being used in promoting their
products
 or services
,
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 are considered to be
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in appropriate
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inappropriate
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 in the present environment we live in.
However
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 I agree that few
adverisements
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advertisements
 are unacceptable these days.
To begin
 with,
this
 is impossible to completely ignore advertisements as it plays a major role in our lifestyle, we can see posters when we step outside and even constant advertisements on our phones by using mail,
sms
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SMS
, social media etc as their platforms to establish their
products
 or services.
Therefore
,
ther
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the
there
 companies before
relweasing
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releasing
 a promotional activity should ensure that it follows the guidelines to make the advertisement ethical, but do the companies follow
this
? In my point of view, I find the advertisement sometimes inappropriate due to their ways of
potraying
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portraying
 their
products
 are quite disturbing for the people at present times. Since advertisements are influential the victims are mostly young people and children
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 for
this
 scam as they end up purchasing unwanted goods which leads to unhealthy buying
habbits
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habits
.
In
addition
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 tobacco
products
 and
alchohol
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alcohol
products
has
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 always been a bad influence for decades now. But, the
promotinal
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promotional
 activities for cigarettes have significantly dropped down in the
last
 few years, to which we must thank the health care
campeigns
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campaigns
 being conducted.
Finaly
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Finally
Final
 to sum up, some methods adopted by companies for their
promotinal
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promotional
actrivities
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activities
 are considered to be morally wrong as they lead to purchasing
unnecessay
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unnecessary
products
whic
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which
 are not needed or too expensive or even unhealthy food habits which will have a negative impact on their life in the future.
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