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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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At present
people
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attracted
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 to the usage of different forms of
medicines
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 which seem to be inefficient
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, it may be hazardous to health.
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, I do agree that the usage of improper alternative medications may have a negative impact on health.
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 with,
people
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are mislead
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 by their friends or families
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therefore
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, leading to trust their recommendation of
medicines
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 which are not precise for their conditions.
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, some
people
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 assume what is best for them on their own without consulting doctors or
physicans
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physicians
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
people
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 refuse to spend more money on consultation rather than taking an option
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 might be dangerous by adopting alternative forms of medicine. In my point of view,
people
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 should never
hesiate
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hesitate
 to visit the doctors
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 before taking on any medication as they are ineffective without proper dosage of the
medicines
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, due to the assumptions of types of
medicines
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.
Awarness
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Awareness
 campaigns should be conducted to prevent
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 trend of using various forms of
medicines
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 on their own.
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to
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 sum up,
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 trend should be abolished as it creates a
nevative
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negative
 impact on health care and
people
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 should avoid trusting their own instincts when it comes down to
medicines
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 whereas, the government can take
incharge
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in charge
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 of
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 preventions by setting up new rules and
guideliness
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guidelines
 in chemist shops to
bannish
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banish
burnish
 providing
medicines
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 without the doctor's prescription.
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