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|Advantages And Disadvantages Of Taking A Year Off Between High School And University

#|advantages #year #school #university
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It is commonly believed that
students
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 must take a
gap
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 of one year before joining the university. A year of
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gap
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the gap
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 would certainly provide
apportunity
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opportunity
 to
students
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 to gain some practical
work
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 experience but there will
also
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 be some drawbacks. One evident benefit of taking
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gap
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 for
students
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 would be to
work
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 full time in the industry. undoubtedly,
students
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 can polish their skills and gain
pratical
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practical
experince
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experience
 by working in the relevant fields. many people would be able to explore their
area
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areas
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 of weakness and strength.
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, working in
startup
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a startup
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 would provide a golden chance for scholars to put their innovative ideas and thoughts. Another reason is
students
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 would be able to earn while learn. Needless to say that doing some professional
work
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 would enable
students
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 to earn and it would reduce the financial burden on the parents of the young minds. A good example of
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 is many
students
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 working in restaurants as a cashier to
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support
 their family.
On the other hand
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, there are obvious disadvantages when it comes to
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study
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studying
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gap
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. One primary
demerits
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is
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are
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negative
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a negative
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 impression for the employers. undeniably,
professional
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professionals
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 do not welcome the candidates with study
gap
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 as they
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considered
this
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 as a misuse of time by
students
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although
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 many children
work
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 to gain
experince
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experience
 and knowledge but many large companies do not
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entertain
such
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 candidates.
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, perception towards people with
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brakes
bikes
beaches
 in academics might create a false impression and
students
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 might face challenges in their career path. In conclusion,
although
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 gaps after completing the school level provide a platform
to
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 the
students
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 to enhance their skill and knowledge
but
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recruiters give preference to the people with regular academic
background
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backgrounds
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.
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