Some people think that young people should follow the traditions of their society and others think young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many individuals believe that following the
traditions
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youngsters is essential. But the opponents point out that
young
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generation
have
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a free right. In the following
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paragraphs
, I will discuss both sides of
this
notion and explain the importance
freedom
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. On the one hand, each country has its own
traditions
values and
customs
. The traditional
princeples
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principles
of society help to bring
people
together. The humans who claim out the importance of
traditions
between young
people
do so because it
contribute
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to
connect
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youngsters to their
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ancestors
through
traditions
.
Moreover
, due to the traditional
principles
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the young generation can learn about the history of their country and nation's
customs
.
For instance
, Kazakh
people
are the most hospitable humans in Central Asia, and their tradition of giving the best place and food to their
guest
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can teach children about respect
to
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others.
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the other hand, today is the
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twenty
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first
century and
people
as
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youngsters have a right to follow
traditions
or not.
Additionally
, the
customs
have changed a lot in the past few decades due to the significant improvements and rapid globalization. It means that
young
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generation is able to create and provide
the
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new
customs
to their relatives in order to show the modern side of values.
Nevertheless
, the traditional values cannot be replaced by modern
traditions
,
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but can be observed and utilized by elders.
For example
,
although
humankind in Kazakhstan
honors
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traditions
, humans are always open to the new proposals given by their children and grandchildren. In
conslusion
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conclusion
, the right of following the nations'
traditions
should be given to every young person, even if some
people
are aware
otherwise
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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