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the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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The graph gives some data about the proportion of the population aged just over 65 or 65 between 1940 and 2040 years in 3 various countries(
USA
,
Sweden
,
Japan
). Overall, units are measured with the per cent. The indexes of
Sweden
 and the
USA
 fluctuated, on the other ,hand the pointer of
Japan
 developed dramatically in the
last
 two decades. The high rate and the minimum result belonged to
Japan
 and the percentages of
Sweden
 and
Japan
 were relatively similar. With regards to
Japan
, generally, the shows levelled off between 1960 and 1980 to each other with approximately just under five in every one hundred and
this
 per cent was the least.
Finally
, the maximum percentage was appreciated with just over one-fourth of the population. In terms of the
USA
,
Sweden
, the statistic of both the
USA
 and
Sweden
 increased sharply from 1940 to 2040, the least amount was illustrated with approximately 7% in 1940 in
Sweden
, in ,contrast the high rate was shown with one-forth of population. The percentage of the
USA
 equalled between 2000 and 2020 with just under fifteen in every one hundred.
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