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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Environmental
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 are a growing concern in today’s world.
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people
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 perceive that they are concerned about nature, they do not follow the guidelines to protect the environment. Some
people
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 argue that the major problem in the environment is the loss of distinct species of plants and animals, while remaining argue that there are more important nature
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.
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, the decline in the particular plant species results in temperature getting hotter around us, which will result in an increase in global warming.
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, there used to
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 trees in every locality that provide protection from the sun, but these trees absorb a lot of CO2 during the photosynthesis process, which will help reduce global warming. As they are being cut down for various purposes,
people
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 are experiencing more heat from the sun. Farmers use animals for various purposes.
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, cows are used to plough the field, certain birds help indirectly by eating harmful insects in their fields. As they are becoming distinct, it is raising a countless number of
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 for them. They find it tough to spend a lot of money on chemicals to kill the harmful insects in their fields.
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 various
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 are facing many
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 with the extinction of certain living organisms. Some say that it is the pollution caused by the vehicles and factories making our environment worse.
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, harmful gases that are released from the factories into nature are causing serious health issues for the
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 living around the factory. Pollution caused by vehicles and other electrical appliances majorly impacts global warming. There are several environmental
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 in
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 day and time, and we cannot weigh which one has the major impact. As the citizens of a responsible nation, we should try to reduce the actions that cause
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 to the ecosystem around us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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