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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the internet has widely replaced their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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It is believed that there is a waste of money on keeping public
libraries
 because the
function
 of the
internet
 substitutes public
libraries
 in many aspects. I agree
with
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that the
function
 of public
libraries
 was replaced by the
internet
 to a large extent.
However
, I
also
 believe that the existence of public
libraries
 is extremely significant. There are some reasons why the
internet
 is more beneficial than
libraries
.
People
 can experience the convenience of online
books
 and reduce their expenses on time and travel. The digital evolution brings a variety of advantages to
people
such
 as the huge amount of types of
books
, unrestricted opening hours of
books
 and the cost of travelling to the public
libraries
 especially for those who live in
the
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rural areas.
The public
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libraries
 can offer knowledge for
people
 from all walks of life. In
this
 case, problems of social inequities can be reduced with the
function
 of
libraries
 because
people
 regardless of the socioeconomic state can have a free opportunity to gain knowledge.
Libraries
 cannot only offer the opportunity for
people
 to read
books
, but
also
 have other functions that cannot be replaced by the
internet
.
In addition
, the
Community
 Council can organize a wide range of activities
such
 as
books
 clubs and
books
 sharing meetings there to gather the local
community
 together so that individuals can feel a sense of belonging
of
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 the
community
.
Furthermore
, it is important for
people
 to increase face to face interaction with each other
by
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this
 way. As far as I am concerned, the replacement of public
libraries
 is unreasonable.
This
 is because everyone in the society has
the
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free access to knowledge and have activities there.
Thus
, it brings the benefit of the public
libraries
 are not restricted to individuals, but
also
 to the
community
 where public
libraries
 exist. On the one hand, the
function
 of the
internet
 that brings to individuals is very beneficial.
On the other hand
, the existence of public
libraries
due
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 to
its
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 advantages to every person in
the
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society.
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