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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the internet has widely replaced their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

#libraries #waste #money #internet #function #idea
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It is believed that there is a waste of money on keeping public
libraries
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 because the
function
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 of the
internet
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 substitutes public
libraries
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 in many aspects. I agree
with
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that the
function
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 of public
libraries
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 was replaced by the
internet
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 to a large extent.
However
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, I
also
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 believe that the existence of public
libraries
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 is extremely significant. There are some reasons why the
internet
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 is more beneficial than
libraries
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.
People
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 can experience the convenience of online
books
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 and reduce their expenses on time and travel. The digital evolution brings a variety of advantages to
people
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such
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 as the huge amount of types of
books
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, unrestricted opening hours of
books
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 and the cost of travelling to the public
libraries
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 especially for those who live in
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rural areas.
The public
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libraries
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 can offer knowledge for
people
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 from all walks of life. In
this
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 case, problems of social inequities can be reduced with the
function
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 of
libraries
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 because
people
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 regardless of the socioeconomic state can have a free opportunity to gain knowledge.
Libraries
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 cannot only offer the opportunity for
people
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 to read
books
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, but
also
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 have other functions that cannot be replaced by the
internet
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.
In addition
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, the
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 Council can organize a wide range of activities
such
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 as
books
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 clubs and
books
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 sharing meetings there to gather the local
community
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 together so that individuals can feel a sense of belonging
of
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 the
community
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.
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, it is important for
people
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 to increase face to face interaction with each other
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this
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 way. As far as I am concerned, the replacement of public
libraries
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 is unreasonable.
This
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 is because everyone in the society has
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free access to knowledge and have activities there.
Thus
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, it brings the benefit of the public
libraries
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 are not restricted to individuals, but
also
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 to the
community
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 where public
libraries
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 exist. On the one hand, the
function
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 of the
internet
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 that brings to individuals is very beneficial.
On the other hand
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, the existence of public
libraries
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due
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 to
its
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their
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 advantages to every person in
the
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society.
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