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2. In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measure could be taken to prevent this?

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Today’s industrial and
construction
 development flourished and the declining quality of air and water is the biggest problem in many developing countries, especially caused by those sectors. In
this
 essay, I intend to explore some possible solutions to prevent
this
 issue. Chief among the solutions to
this
 problem is gaining awareness about the environment to people, mainly the owner of
industry
 and
construction
.
This
 is because the development of
industry
 and
construction
 are not accompanied by its realization of the impact on the surrounding environment.
Therefore
, the government should educate the public and owner those industries through seminars and counselling and
also
 give
solution
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 to industrial and
construction
 waste. In order to create a big impact, we should make a sustainable movement
which
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 is disseminated to the public. While the owners of those businesses are starting to prevent these issues, we must contribute with real action.
This
 contribution might be in the form of sustainability programs –
a
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reforestation involving the government and with the local community and create the anti-plastic movement.
Last
 but not least, tightening the policy about
industry
 waste management and gas emissions produced
by
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in
construction
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the construction
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sectors
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 is a must. The policy leads to
improvement
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the improvement
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 of our built environment as well as mitigate the imminent threat of climate change. A green buildings policy is one of the examples for the Architecture, Engineering, and
Construction
industry
. In summary,
this
 problem is unlikely to be resolved in the short term, especially for the areas already affected.
However
, I am convinced
this
 solution at least would reduce the decreasing quality of air and water in the future.
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