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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Do you have difficulty writing a to what extent do you agree or disagree essay?

#country #language #difficulty
To not
to
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know the
language
 of the place we live can
definetly
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definitely
 cause social as well as practical problems, as
language
 is significant for communication. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will give the reasons
as
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 how
problametic
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problematic
 can it be to stay in a country like that.
For instance
, let's take a scenario where a young girl has shifted to
United
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 Kingdom to study.
However
, there could be any
such
 instance where she might be out on some work and because of not knowing the
language
, there are high chances of the girl getting trapped.
This
 can be a major point of concern as it can be highly detrimental for the girl.
In addition
, adults can
also
 be easily fooled.
For example
, let's think a man had to shift
Australia
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 on
virtue
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 of his work and would be staying there for few years. By not knowing the native
language
, he can easily be cheated by house owners or by shop keepers by
get
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 charged more than needed.
Moreover
, let's imagine a situation where a woman had to shift
United
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the United
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 States due to few reasons and due to not knowing the
language
, she will not be able to communicate
to
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 her neighbours or to the locals there. She would be feeling so lonely and eventually could be extremely
excrutiating
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excruciating
 for the women. In conclusion, I
personal
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 agree that now knowing the native
language
 of the country can have serious repercussions on the individuals.
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