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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad.To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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In modern
society
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, the
field
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 of education changed a lot in which many students likes to go outside of their country for
further
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 learning. In
this
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 essay,I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
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 statement.
Moreover
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,International experience enhance students ability to overcome difficulties related to learning and these norms give them better job opportunity in other
countries
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.
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majority
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the majority
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 of young engineers in India now migrating to other
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 like
USA
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the USA
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 Canada and Australia.
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, global trends like
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helps
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 to impart economic sufficiency and more human resources internationally. Apparently, more international professionals
means
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 more flow of foreign money in their
society
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.
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,
to
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this
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 money exchange helps new infrastructure facilities and constructive policies in the
field
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 of
banking
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the banking
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 system.
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,if the
people
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 get better jobs
this
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 will definitely increase their standard of
life
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living
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 and in which
people
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 purchase more products and goods from their
society
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However
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, it brings
a
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apply
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positive trends of consumerism in their
society
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. Admittedly,
migration
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the migration
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 of talented students
results
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inresults
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 lack of creative employees and
less
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fewer
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 industrial professionals in developing
countries
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. Reportedly, the
field
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 of science and research only concentrated in rich
countries
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 because most of the scientist are belongs to these
countries
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 which adversely affect the growth of poor
countries
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.
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,
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lake
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lack
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 of talented
people
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 brings negative
impact
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impacts
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 especially in the
field
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 of education.
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, In China,
now
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 government provides extra payment for university professors because
last
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 5 years 55%
Chinese
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of Chinese
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 educationists migrated to
USA
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the USA
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 for continuing their research work. So government give them scholarship and financial aid for their studies in order to mitigate their migration. In conclusion,
people
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's way of learning is changed, now everyone
consider
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 more money rather than their social responsibility. So government should ensure better payment and facilities for their own talented
people
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otherwise
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 they will definitely
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loose
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lose
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