Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed by some that success in sports
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by the muscular
strength
of the player whereas many opine that mental
strength
is more important for performing well on
field
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. The essay will discuss why physical
strength
is far more significant than mind power. On the one hand, almost all
the
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sports activity involves body
strength
. Physical sport is not a brain
game
and a player can not achieve
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simply being mentally strong. Sportspersons
those
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who perform
on
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field
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require tremendous physical
strength
and stamina. They have to show their excellence instantly.
For instance
, those who are playing football should be able to perform for 90 minutes or more at
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stress. As well
as
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, they have to jump, run, defend and attack, and all of these activities are performed by the body. There are many more athlete
game
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games
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like boxing, swimming where physical
strength
is
ultimate
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the ultimate
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option. In the same way, mental
strength
obviously
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required. It is true that to achieve success in
sport
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individual
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individuals
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need to be focused and set the goal logically.
Such
as,
cricket
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the cricket
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team captain has the responsibility to make a
player
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list
which
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decides who will
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play
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paly
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play
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when. Captain can change play policy at any point
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time.
Secondly
, those who are playing
indoor
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an indoor
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game
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games
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like chess demand absolute concentration which is the key to success. So, it is
also
compulsory to go through various kinds of
learning
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the learning
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process
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processes
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to acquire mental
strength
. In conclusion, plays need both mental and physical power to win a
game
;
however
, bodily
strength
is a lot more important than mental
strength
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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