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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

It is often believed that that the advancement in technology will contribute to decreasing the
existance
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culture
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, which lead to increasing the difficulty to make them compatible. In my point of view, I would completely agree with
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 statement because
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 development
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 weakened peoples' faith and beliefs about the importance of protecting their
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 from being lost. Some would argue that technology
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 significantly contributed
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 promoting the importance of following the traditional habits in each society across different generations.
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 is advancement has made it possible for
people
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 to preserve their national heritage and identity through using the latest techniques and tools, which have wide applications in solidifying the
culture
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's roots in peoples' hearts and minds. Social media platforms, where
people
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 can share posts about their cultural stories and habits with their followers, are one the examples of using computerized data in raising the sense of the cultural
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knowledge
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, it would effectively connect
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 to their roots as well as foster their sense of patriotism.
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, I think that technological development
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turn
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 the world more globalized by creating a global and unified
culture
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. It stimulates humans to comply with the trends and beliefs that are utterly different from their cultural beliefs so that they can become part of the global cult.
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, the
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 of social media platforms and mobile applications have pushed their users away from wearing their traditional customs as well as speaking their local language.
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 trend has resulted in cultivating the idea that
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 a
culture
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 would consider as a sign of
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 and ignorance. To sum up, I would
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argue
 that technology and
culture
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 are going in opposite directions because
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technological development has a dominant impact in inducing
people
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 toward relinquishing their local traditions and complying with
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culture
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 that
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technology
 have created for them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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