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Doing an enjoyable activities with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Performing interesting
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 with the minors can contribute to attaining
skills
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 than
books
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.ln my opinion,I support the idea that getting
children
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perform
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 practical
skills
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 learning is better than reading
books
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.
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 with, experience is the best teacher meaning
children
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 are able to retain what they have learnt through getting involved in performing the tasks given.Another reason is that they are able to demonstrate back after learning
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 they don't forget.
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, performing interesting
activities
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 with them will
also
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 enable them to develop
interest
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 as the say goes like father like son.
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, a study conducted by
music
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the music
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 academy showed that 90% of parents who were musicians
also
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 influenced
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children
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 to performing
artist
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.
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, parents have
great
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a great
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 influence on their siblings
on
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 deciding interesting paths.
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, performing interesting
activities
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 with
children
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 does not contribute to gaining relevant
skills
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 and reading is necessary.
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,
children
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 are able to read and understand so that they can develop
interest
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on
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 the given
activities
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.
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, lawyers who develop
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interest
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an interest
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 in cases following
reading
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the reading
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 of
books
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.
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, it is impeccable that minors dig deep
in to
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there
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their
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books
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 to have what they want. To conclude, performing interesting with
children
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 will make them develop their personal
interest
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 as well as different
skills
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 of performing the given task.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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