Some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society, while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Few
people
believe that individuals are becoming more
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on each other.
This
is because, the
economy
is not
self sustaining
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at
this
period of time to live an
indepentdent
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independent
life, thereby making persons rely on each other for
support
.
This
support
could be financially, emotionally etc.
For instance
,
an
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economy
where the cost of living is high because of the inflation in prices, the standard of living of many human beings reduces
therefore
, persons who earn more and can help with excess
they
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have
support
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others
at
this
time.
Also
,
upbringing
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of
people
can
also
result
into
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being dependent on
others
in
such
a way that when one is brought to understand that
responsiblities
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responsibilities
are to be taken cared of by
others
, relying on
others
will become rampant in
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society.
On the other hand
,
others
believe that
individulas
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individuals
are becoming more on their own compare to relying on someone else for
support
reason been that, some
people
believe that being independent gives a sense of responsibility, which means
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able to take up challenges on their own with no aid of
support
.
This
can be
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as
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result
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a result
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of living in a
communtiy
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community
where the
economy
is
self sustaining
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self-sustaining
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.
Also
, it can sometimes be
as a result
of upbringing where
people
have been taught how to take up challenges on their own.
For example
, a
finiancially
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financially
financial
self-supporting person who finds
his
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himself
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or herself in an
economy
that is
not
sustainble
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sustainable
,
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will increase his or her sources of income,
insteading
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instead
of searching
of
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for
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any aid
of
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or
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support
from
others
. I am of the opinion that
,
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individuals are becoming more self-supporting in my society because
,
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most
people
have increased their sources of income
also
have a renewed mindset of taking up challenges that come their way. To conclude, It is of great essence to be self-relying in
a
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society compare to been dependent on
others
for
support
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnectedness
  • globalization
  • digital communication platforms
  • mutual dependency
  • economic globalization
  • international supply chains
  • social validation
  • advancements in technology
  • individualism
  • technological tools
  • smartphones
  • personal computers
  • cultural shift
  • self-sufficiency
  • individualistic attitudes
  • personal achievement
  • self-care
  • interdependency
  • societal structures
  • emotional support
  • underlying foundations
  • human interaction
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