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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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People have different views about whether
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 should choose a course they like or they should be forced to
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 something that has a good
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. While having a good
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 is important, I believe studying in their
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 choice is more important. There are various reasons why people believe that
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 should
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 certain courses at university. They may assert that majors like engineering, medicine, and IT are probably more beneficial than other majors. They provide more social levels, job opportunities, and income.
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, their life quality would be improved to a high level.
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, governments can benefit from these special courses by filling the gaps in the industry and make more progress in their countries.
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, a focus on these subjects in high education can lead to higher social achievement, more respect, and a guaranteed
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 even for the
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 generations. In spite of these arguments, I believe that
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 should be free to choose their preferred areas of
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. In my opinion, if
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 have passion for what they are studying, they can be successful in the
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 and society would benefit from their profession.
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, they can feel peace at themselves which is so crucial during their lives.
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 that, nobody can predict the
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 and it is really possible that we need more artists in different areas than engineers and dentists. In conclusion,
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 it may seem sensible to force
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 to
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 more useful courses, I personally prefer the current system of education that everybody has the right to choose whatever he/she likes.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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