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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
It is undeniable that the world has had changed from an agricultural community into a modern society. In that case, the state governments spend
money
 to improve the transportations. Some
people
 think that the governments should spend a lot of
money
 on railways rather than motor lines. From my point of view, I disagree with
this
 view for many reasons. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, some
people
 think that the leadership should improve the
railroads
 rather than
road
transports
 because the
railroads
 are an important line to transport many products and passengers in long-distance between cities, and the
trains
 have low price ticket, compared with other
transports
.
Additionally
, they think that the
trains
 have lass risk of accidents due to the tracks must have
its
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 own lines which other
transports
 cannot use, and the railways are often maintained by engineers, as the results, many persons have the confidence to use the
railroads
 rather than others.
On the other hand
, other
people
, including me, strongly argue that the ministry of the country should spend
money
 on
road
 transportations rather than
railroads
 because the roads are used by many
people
 and many
transports
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means of transport
modes of transport
types of transport
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such
 as cars, buses, motorbikes and bicycles. In short-distance,
road
 vehicles are more suitable rather than
trains
.
For instance
, when
people
 want to travel some areas near their home, they should use
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cars or
the
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buses rather than
trains
.
Moreover
,
road
transports
 are the connector with other
transports
 which cannot access the destination.
However
,
road
 transportation can offer some disadvantages.
For example
, there
are
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 low security that can cause accidents to
user
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the user
a user
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. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
this
 point because
in
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 my opinion,
road
transports
 can access
easily
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 than
trains
.
Although
 I disagree with
this
 viewpoint,
the
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trains
 play an important role in the transportation of each country.
Therefore
, it is recommended that the authority of the country should split the
money
 appropriately on both developments.
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