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The increase in the production of consumer goods causes damage to the natural environment, what are the reasons and what can we do to solve this problem?

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Environmental pollution has become a grave concern across the globe. Manufacturing human needs are causing distress to the planet which can hamper living beings in the future drastically. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing some of the reasons and solutions related to
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the most relevant cause would be the growth of the population in some countries beyond the healthy count.
Therefore
, in order to meet the requirements, people are utilizing the natural resources inadequately which creates an imbalance in the environment.
For example
, to generate electricity water is used excessively and
hence
, there is a lack of drinking water in many parts of the world.
Secondly
, to produce goods there is an increase in work in factories all year round leading to immense air pollution ultimately leading to serious medical conditions.
For instance
, sugar factories emit carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide, methane, etc. which results in greenhouse warming. The solutions for these problems can be as follows,
firstly
, in order to generate electricity other sources must be utilised as much as possible
such
 as solar energy, wave energy, etc.
This
 can be greatly attributed to saving water.
Secondly
, today an increasing number of population is moving towards countryside due to lack of sufficient land in cities or towns.
Hence
,
this
 population is affected adversely due to industrialization.
Therefore
, the government should impose strict rules against factories for the disposal of byproducts. To recapitulate, the factors leading to
this
 issue are innumerable,
nevertheless
, there is always a solution to everything. The authorities and public should work in coordination to save our planet earth, to help us live a healthy life in a clean environment.are
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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