The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience..

Nowadays
people
becoming more unhealthy become of their lifestyles. A lot of researchers find out that
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becoming a
threath
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to how long will
people
live longer in the future. I totally agree with
statement
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and
this
essay will discuss the reasons why
its
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becoming a
threath
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threat

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to humans life.
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first

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, lifestyle has a great influence on peoples health.
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of it is
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lifetyle
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lifestyle

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, lying and doing nothing for the whole day can cause harmful
efffect
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effect
effects

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and our body will start to
detorait
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decorate
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.
Second
, bad eating habits a lot of
people
loves to eat
junkfoods
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junk foods
junk food
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and
fastfood
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fast food

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. Eating
this
kind of food is not healthy because
they
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cannot provide
proper
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nutrients that our body needed.
Lastly
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social media is one of the
culprit
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people
tend to be lazy because of the influence of social media. Like I wanted to exercise but I want to stay at
home
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the home

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whole
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day and browse my phone. In conclusion, I totally agree
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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