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Memorization of information by frequent repetition (rote learning) plays a role in most education systems. Do the advantages of this method of learning outweigh its disadvantages?

One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is
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 learning. The majority of coaching institutes emphasise cramming techniques to
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 the information. There are both merits and demerits ,
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 the latter outdo the former. There is a deluge of arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant one is that it will shatter the basic foundation of a country and its citizens.
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, students
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 who do frequent repetition to learn things
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 incapable of building basic fundamental knowledge.
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 of conceptual enlightenment, they not only lose their confidence but are
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 unable to compete with other skilled pupils on a global scale. Owing to
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 an education system, it
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 a negative impression of a country across the globe and might impact its development. Needless to say, all these demerits have a far-reaching impact on society and individuals. Another overt facet is that
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 graduates would not be
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society. Even though a nation has sufficient manpower, eventually the lack of skilled resources would
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 trades to hire foreign workers. To articulate, a survey has been conducted by market researchers which
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 the fact that
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 insufficient quality workers, various nations invite 2 million IT students from India every year.
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, the local university students, who passed out on the basis of rote learning, are limited to indulge in
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 jobs.
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, it is apparent why schools need to focus
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 elementary concepts
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 cramming. Conclusively, the above-mentioned shreds of evidence
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 the fact that
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 of teaching will solely decide how the future generation
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. The wider folks cannot deny the legitimacy of the fact that repetitive learning mechanisms will
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, one can conclude that the drawbacks of
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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Say your view at the start and use two or three main ideas in order.
coherence
Keep one big idea in each paragraph and link ideas with small, clear words.
examples
Use real, simple examples. If you cite a study, give a plain fact or date.
grammar
Watch grammar and word form. check tense, plural, and articles.
lexical
Use easy words and simple form. Do not use long or hard words unless you are sure.
task response
Clear view on the issue.
coherence
Some use of linking words to move thoughts.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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