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The line graph illustrates the types and amount of
fast food
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fast-food
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 consumed by Australian teenagers over a 25 years period from 1975 to 2000.
Initially
, Australian teenagers enjoyed eating
pizza
 more than the rest of fats foods, but by the end of the period,
fish
 and
chips
 were the most linked fast food. In 1975,
Pizza
 was the most famous among the youth while
fish
 and
chips
 and
Hamburgen
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Hamburger
 were the least populated meals.
However
, between 1975 to 1985, the
ration
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ratio
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 of the least favourite
snackes
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snacks
 significantly rose from 10
times
 to 80
times
. While the line graph shows a considerable fluctuation in
Pizza
 consumption. In 1975, the
pizza
cosumption
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consumption
 rate was 100
times
 a
year
 while the data for after the five years dropped by approximately 10
time
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times
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 and in 1985, it was
significatly
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significantly
 surged.
Moreover
, In the middle years, the
pizza
 eaters dramatically decreased by 60
times
 a
year
, while the count for
fish
 and
chips
 consumers increased by 90
times
 a
year
. The
ration
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ratio
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 for
humburger
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hamburger
 eaters considerably climbed to 70
times
 a
year
. By the end of the period,
Fish
 and
chips
 became the highest fast-food dish while
pizza
end
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 up
beging
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being
 the least liked dish.
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