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You have seen a advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you about a six-month child babysitter advertisement in an Australian magazine. I am considering that I am the most suitable person for
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 my experiences and abilities. During the mathematics teacher training I received at school, I babysat many children part-time and received serious positive testimonials. During my teacher education, I attended
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training specifically on child development under the age of 7 and earned certificates of achievement.
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, since I grew up in a small village with my 6 younger siblings, I always enjoy creating fun games and spending time with people younger than me.
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, I came to Australia 2 years ago to take part in different education programs and worked in a kindergarten. During my six-month stay, I make many observations about culture and social life. In
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coherence cohesion
Remember to maintain a logical order in presenting your ideas. Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each addressing a distinct point.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closings in formal letters. Consider using 'Dear [Parents' Names],' if known, and a more formal sign-off such as 'Yours sincerely'.
coherence cohesion
Develop each paragraph with a single idea and provide examples or details to support it.
task achievement
Ensure you fully address all aspects of the task. The response should include reasons for wanting the job, as well as how your skills and experience make you a good fit.
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Maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid informal language or contractions in formal writing.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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