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Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

#art #part #society #expression #culture #children #focus #subjects
Art
 plays indispensable
roles
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 in
younsters
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youngsters
 life.
Art
 gives an opportunity to young
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ones
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one
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ones
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 to express their feelings and culture by doing
craft
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.
However
, other
subjects
also
children
 should learn in schools adolescent cannot compromise with
subjects
 by choosing another one.
This
 essay totally supports the above statement and the reasons behind
this
 will be explained in the subsequent paragraphs. To start with, youngsters would be able to express their
toughts
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thoughts
 by doing craft many of
children
 have
lack
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 in
lingustic
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linguistic
 capabilities . With the help of
art
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 youth would be able to create their imagination they become more creative . Some
of
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children
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the children
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 who
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 from disorders they can reduce their stress like some
of
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children
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the children
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 face obstacles in their
chilhood
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childhood
 age
such
 as anxiety,
burden
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the burden
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 of study if they spend some of
span
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 on
art
 it helps them venting out . Apart from
this
, most importantly in these
days
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 teenagers can take up
art
 professionally they can earn money by expressing their
art
 in public . As far
i
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 am concerned that,
art
 and other
subjects
 should have balance it provides holistic development to
youngster
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the youngster
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.
Children
 should participate in both of them it helps them to be more intellectual as well as become
them
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creative. Once
children
shows
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 their
intreset
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interest
 in crafts they can give their better performance in other
subjects
 like
in
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maths, science most of the
children
 get bored
from
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 these
subjects
 .
Nowadys
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Nowadays
,
in
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every
institute
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 have
palthora
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plethora
 academic stress on
children
 with the help of
art
 youth can concentrate on their syllabus it
also
 enhance their grasping power. Taking everything into
considration
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consideration
,
art
 has numerous
of
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positive benefits for
adolesecent
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adolescent
adolescents
 from my view
children
 should learn both
subjects
 in their schools like it is
not
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wastage
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 of time one can grab new
skill
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 with their
another
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another subject
other subjects
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subjects
 .
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