Some people think in order to continually improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others feel that this would result in a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion..

They say that Learning never stops. We learn till our
last
breath and it is actually responsible to improve our character, It defines what kind of human being we would be. And now we can see there’s
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of improvement in
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experience. We have seen
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the evolution
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from Nature
classroom
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to Google
classrooms
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. Electronic classes where children sit at their home and learn various things where
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vital
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role. It has been
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at every stage in
this
process
and now
students
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to evaluate and criticize their
teachers
,
while
others feel that it can disturb the discipline in the classroom.
Teachers
are considered to be
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who
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valuable lessons to
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a child
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. There
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a time when all mistakes of
teachers
were acceptable and unquestionable where
teachers
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a dictator
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dictator
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and
students
were following the instructions given by their
mentor
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.
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this
process
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changed drastically and now
students
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liberty
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to judge their
teachers
and give them feedback which in my perception should be limited
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some extent because there are
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of mischievous children in the classroom who can portray
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image of the authority and can disturb the environment of study. In my
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there should be transparency in the
process
where we can validate the
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process
like cameras or recordings. In
this
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authorities can track their own performance and make changes rather than giving power to developing minds.
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we can practice gaining feedback from
students
with limited resources like
google
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feedback forms.
To conclude
would like to say both aspects are beneficial if one is true to himself/herself in order to judge an experienced person and authorities should limit with boundaries for
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they are providing to
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Evaluate
  • Criticize
  • Improve educational outcomes
  • Feedback loop
  • Democratic school culture
  • Constructive criticism
  • Authority
  • Fair and constructive feedback
  • Skewed
  • Educational outcomes
  • Engagement
  • Motivation
  • Timely interventions
  • Teacher development
  • Learning experience
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