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Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social conseauences some people think only government actions can solves this problem Give resoon for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knoledge or example.

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It is believed by most of the officials that the economic growth of a
country
 is their fundamental goal, which some citizens are opened
with
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 the fact that tackling
of
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social
problems
 like housing shortage is as much important. According to my point of view, the former statement is of greater importance.
To begin
 with, we all are aware finance plays a vital role in any social activity whether it be in any activity referring to the
country
. There are two main reasons why financial evaluation affects the tackling of social
problems
.
Firstly
, the economic progress will lead to well-paid job creation and it will increase householders opportunities etc.
Secondly
, if required finance is allocated for building new houses by
government
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 it will develop the standard living of the people in the
country
 and will cause decreasing home prices.
In addition
 to the above determinant, the development of other sectors like the construction industry, domestic services is significantly necessary. If cheap housing is built
then
 all of the people can buy new houses,
for example
, every graduated or skilled person can buy or rent a new house, which will
also
 make the economical stability of the
country
 more strong. Another reason is if strata of the population in need of assistance
is
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 protected by
government
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the government
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, it will cause
increase
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an increase
the increase
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of
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in
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country
 economics and social sustainability of the
country
. To sum up, Tackling social
problems
 by
government
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the government
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 are important, but
only
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 cannot solve all
problems
. So, people should
first
 aim to make the
country
 financially stable.
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