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Some people think that criminal behaviour can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are lots of
crimes
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 happening around us every day. The authorities try to figure out the possible reasons for committing
crimes
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. Many of them believed that it contributes to the problem of genes and the others claim that it is an acquired action due to some special stories. In my opinion, the latter has a higher possibility for a person to become an offender.
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, it is commonly said that
crimes
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 are related to the problem of genes. Criminal offences
such
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 as sexual
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 are related to the inborn nature of humans. Most of these offenders have
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deficiency
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 in their personal
characters
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character
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 which lead to
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abnormal
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.
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, some of their acts are due to their curiosity towards sex which is classified as
psychological
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 effect.
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, it is clear that criminal
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attributed
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 to
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genetics
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 factors.
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, some people carry out anti-social behaviours because of
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their own stories, like a financial burden. They are so poor that unaffordable to take care of themselves let alone their family.
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, they opt to become pick-pockets so as to obtain valuable items. Worse still, some of them may participate in bank robberies. As can clearly be seen from
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 example, a particular condition resulted in
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criminal
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. In conclusion, no matter the reasons for genes or special circumstances, these two elements can lead to criminal
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 they co-exist
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 a certain extent. After analysing both points of view, I think the
crimes
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 are most likely due to
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environmental grounds.

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