In many countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of crime. However, another effective way is to provide people with a better education so that they cannot become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whenever we open the newspaper or news channel, we can see
crime
everywhere in the world. From the small age
itself
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we should educate the child about the things which we cannot do. In many countries,
jail
is the best solution to the problem of
crime
. I agree with the above statement, and I will explain why in the following essay. As far as I
concerned
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,
punishment
is the best option for the
crime
. If they will not get the
punishment
they will repeat the
crime
again in the same form or the other form.
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, if a thief
take
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a
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apply

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small things from one place, no one can catch them, that will give him to take more precious items from the very
next
time
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onwards

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Correctional
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facility is the best way of
punishment
. Through the
jail
, they will get the education regarding
their
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crime
that he did. Once they enter
into
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the prison, they feel
isolation
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from
the
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normal life which include
the
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family, friends and relatives. They will lose their freedom as well. Because of the strict
jail
rules, they may decide to become good
from
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the rest of their life. The thief will think, he could have
work
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out of the
jail
and earn more money and take care of their family, if he was out the prison. Based on the facts which I outlined above, I strongly agree that the
punishment
in the form of
correctional
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facility is the best solution of
crime
than we give only education to the criminals.
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