in some countries the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The shooting incidence
are
increasing in many countries because people are having guns in Change the verb form
is
at
their respective Change preposition
apply
home
. The following statements are the point of my views about Fix the agreement mistake
homes
this
topic
Personally, i
agree that one of the reasons Change the capitalization
I
of
increasing shooting cases is the availability of Change preposition
for
the
firearms at their respective homes. Though some people have believed that having it may serve as their personal Correct article usage
apply
defense
to protect themselves and the whole family but sometimes it is being used in Change the spelling
defence
wrong
way. Add an article
the wrong
a wrong
For instance
, in
most Change preposition
on
Fix the agreement mistake
occasions
occasion
men are very fond of showcasing their firearms at home and they try to operate Add a comma
,occasion
it
in front of their friends and shoot it anywhere. Sometimes it can hit anybody at that place and may cause serious damage. So it is important to handle the guns Correct pronoun usage
them
in
Correct your spelling
inappropriate
appropriate
way and Add an article
an appropriate
the appropriate
also
it
should be used in the safest place.
Correct pronoun usage
they
However
, on the other side of the coin, some people do have it because for
leisure. Change preposition
of
For example
, they use it for sports. Many individuals especially men are in to
Join the words
into
this
sports already but the same thing to do, use it with precautionary
Add an article
a precautionary
the precautionary
measure
for the safety of everyone.
To conclude, having guns at home is good for personal Fix the agreement mistake
measures
defense
Change the spelling
defence
however
it should be kept and used in
the right time. Same as well in using it for Change preposition
at
sporting
event, it should be used in the right place with precautionary measures.Add an article
a sporting
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite