People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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the topic before deducing a reasonable conclusion. There are some people who opine that
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online material makes
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life easy for the students to
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in times of covid. The academic institutions were shut , due to
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who reckon that printed material is more beneficial for children. Printed
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them away from unwanted subject matters. The printed material gave parents , an opportunity to keep
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on children's studies. According to a
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it showed that 70% IQ level was found in students who studies offline through printed matter
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whereas
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through online material. In order to put forward my
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convenient
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accordingly
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