Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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of students feel it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school nowadays. There are many reasons for the
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statement. I will explain the reasons in the following essay.
First
of all, social
media
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students from their studies.
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, social
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platforms like, Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and Whatsapp are
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trending social
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sites all around the world. Whatever things
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in their life like happy or sad matters, they upload on
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social
media
. So every
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can see and comment about it as well as like it. If a student
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something on
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social
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, he will keep on checking it to read the comment and the number of likes he received. Youtube is
also
an app uses to watch videos. Even if we open the app to search the study material, advertisements will come to distract in the form of other
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topics like tv shows, film clipping,
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, cartoons and games so on. For a student no need a
phone
in fact. If it is very necessary to have a
phone
, parents can provide them
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call facility mobile phones. Once they are at home
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can keep the
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parent
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can keep an eye on it, so they can have an idea that what the kid is using with the app.
Moreover
,
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parent
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parents
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can make a
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for the kids’ and
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or
parent
can check
wheather
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whether
children are stick to the timetable or not.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distractions
  • focus
  • pay attention
  • lack of interest
  • motivation
  • fatigue
  • sleep
  • classroom environment
  • teaching methods
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • workload
  • support
  • active learning strategies
  • engaging
  • student-centered teaching
  • realistic goals
  • rewards
  • balanced lifestyle
  • screen time
  • breaks
  • physical activity
  • support and guidance
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