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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Inter-personal
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 are vital both in
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personal and professional life. In
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 context, a stratum of people
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 that the primary goal of
employees
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 is to focus on
work
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,
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 while being on good terms with their colleagues is not crucial.
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, I opine that workplace associations are beneficial in terms of enhanced synergy between various teams and the members. Irrefutably, some executives point out that the fundamental responsibility of
employees
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 is to focus on finishing assigned tasks well before the deadline.
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, socializing and forming
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relationship
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 with peers often reduces productivity and quality of
work
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 as the net
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spend
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 on projects will reduce significantly.
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, it is difficult for any
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 to
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 throughout the office
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 and they would require few minutes of breaks in between.
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 will allow them to interact with their peers which would aid in relaxing; thereby, improving performance at
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.
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, a study published in the journal Behavioral Science in 2018 indicated that nurses’ performance increased when
quality
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 of
work
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 relationship between managers and staff nurses improved in Vietnam.
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, good
work
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relationships
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 offer improved
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teamwork
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team
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teamwork
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work
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 and collaboration. If
employees
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 are barely on speaking terms and are allocated to a project, it will take a considerable amount of
time
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 for them to break the ice and
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 together.
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, team members who
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 good relationship will be willing to collaborate for the betterment of the project.
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, when
employees
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 are connected to a company through these bonds they are less likely to seek
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employment in other firms as friendships take
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 to build in the new office.
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 might improve a higher employee retention rate. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that,
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,
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 workplace
relationships
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 might affect productivity, I strongly believe that these
relationships
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 have a positive impact on
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team
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work
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, collaboration and performance.
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