young people who commit crimes should be punished in the same way as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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should uniform the

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teenagers’ particular

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adults. Personally speaking, I agree with the former opinion. Some argue that it is advantageous for the government to apply a uniform

punishment

for offenders regardless of their age group [3] because

such

uniformity builds up a strong legal code by serving as a deterrence that ensures the consequences of committing crimes is known to the public. Each member of the

society

would have no doubt that there is a zero-tolerance policy implemented (in place) towards the lawbreakers; through

this

, law-abiding citizens would build up confidence towards the safety and security within the community as a whole. All of the things mentioned above should be the ultimate goal of setting up a legal code, and

thus

this

kind of zero-tolerance policy serves

this

purpose very well. Others maintain that there should be other ways to punish juvenile delinquents because issuing a less severe

punishment

serves as a good way for them to reflect on what they have done and make a change. In order to fulfil the real purpose of

punishment

, which is to rehabilitate them and reshape them into functional members of

society

, the appropriacy of the

punishment

must be considered, meaning that the

punishment

can neither be too severe nor too lenient. Suppose that the

punishment

is severe to the point where the young criminal suffers from a mental breakdown, our purpose of rehabilitating them and trying to make them good members of

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society

is defeated.

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, if there is much leniency for them and may develop the kind of thinking where they think they can get away with anything just because they’re young.

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, it‘s imperative that we find the perfect balance between leniency and zero-tolerance. In conclusion, as the reason above

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I think uniformity in crime

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is good for the whole

society

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way because the leniency may breed

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more crime and danger.