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Some people think that criminal behaviour can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few individuals believe that criminal acts could be hereditary, but others consider that only situations could cause some
people
 to commit an offensive
act
. On one hand, certain psychological disorders that are genetically transmitted can provoke that individual to commit
crime
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.
On the other hand
,
circumtances
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circumstances
such
 as poverty and unemployment triggers
people
 to perform an unlawful
act
. There are some psychological conditions which genetic in nature, could lead
people
 to commit
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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. A person having
mental
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a mental
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 disorder lacks
an
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the
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 ability to
percieve
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perceive
 things and their thought process is altered.
Moreover
, their state of mind is altered, resulting
into
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 delusions and hallucinations.
For example
, a survey was conducted at Tihar jail in Pune, majority of the
offerenders
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offenders
 were diagnosed having schizophrenia, which is an
inhereited
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inherited
psycotic
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psychotic
 disorder that contributes to violent acts.
In contrast
, certain circumstances
such
 as
unemployement
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unemployment
 and poverty can provoke a person to commit an offence. There are times where an individual makes a wrong choice in order to survive that particular moment.
For instance
, since the pandemic started due to COVID-19,United States have reported a dramatic increase in crimes
such
 as burglary, shoplifting, and robbery, as a significant number of
people
 lost their jobs and had no source of income to overcome the need
of
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for
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 their basic
necesities
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necessities
. In my opinion, certain situations often
leads
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lead
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people
 to commit crime even though they are not willing to perform that particular
act
.
People
 tend to have indecisiveness to choose between right and wrong,
also
 they lack the ability to overcome the problem by finding a correct solution. To conclude, particular
psyhcotic
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psychotic
 conditions can lead a person to perform an unlawful
act
 due to their dissociative thoughts.
However
,
circumstanial
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circumstantial
 need
also
 triggers an individual to commit an offence.
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