Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Several perceive that
government
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should run medical
services
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in place of private companies.
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, the
government
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has enough human resources to facilitate medical
services
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so that they can be felt deep inside the rural areas
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that no individual will be unable to seek health care due to either inadequate facilities or medical personnel. For, example in South Africa 80% of medical
services
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are run by the
government
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hence
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facilities are all well equipped with what is required to run to the maximum.
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Moreover
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it is imperative that the
government
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is in a position to train the medical
professional
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professionals
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such
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that they are well updated with
knowledge
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to be able
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cases.
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, it is prudent that the
government
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which
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got enough resources to run medical
services
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so that the society can be healthy.
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,
private
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the private
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firm
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firms
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are indispensable,
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however
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they can be high-priced to run the medical
services
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such
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that the community will not be able to seek
services
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wherever they need them. For, example research that was done by
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the university
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of Nairobi in 2019 on medical
services
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that are run by private firms performs poorly comparing with countries run by
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government
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the government
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. In, addition the quality of
services
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will be substandard since the firm might not be able to meet the standard due to insufficient
fund
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funds
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hence
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badly off
services
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in the society. In conclusion, facilities run by the
government
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serve the community well as every person is in a position to seek
services
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without interruption.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental human right
  • equitable access
  • government-run healthcare
  • economies of scale
  • negotiate
  • healthcare costs
  • profit motives
  • compromised healthcare
  • health inequities
  • accountable
  • public health objectives
  • reinvest
  • infrastructure
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