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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's competitive world, obtaining a higher education that too from a reputed university,
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 from overseas, undoubtedly has numerous positive aspects rather than negative.
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 is that pursuing a study
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abroad has significant advantages that outweigh
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 disadvantages, therefor students opt to go out of the country. In accordance
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, let's throw some light on the brighter sides.
Firstly
, foremost thing, having a degree from
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 recognized university, always a
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 for the career.
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 it increases the Weightage of qualifications. Nowadays, big companies whether it is a multination or domestic,
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prefer candidates who studied abroad
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 of the day, they look for the best talent along with a great personality for the business.
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, IBM is one of the big IT companies, wherein they were looking for a regional marketing head. There were many applicants for
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giving a promotion to the existing employee from the same department.
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 the employee had a master degree from
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 reputed university in
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. So
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 is that, if
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the student
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 has a degree/ higher education from abroad, life gets a bit easier.
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, it becomes much easier for the students who wants to settle down
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abroad. So
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 studies, they can go for a job and settle the life.
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, securing a job
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abroad nowadays
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 way challenging.
Last
 but not the least, studying abroad develops the overall personality of a student as they excel in their management skills, discipline level, interpersonal skills and many more. So it becomes a perfect combo to lead a good life. With respect to the
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 elements, there are considerable plus points that diminish the negative aspects. For a better future, it is always advisable to count on positive sides rather than worrying about the negative side.
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