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The reason that most people are in debt is the overuse as well as irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks ought to do a background check and only issue credit cards to individuals who have the ability to pay back their debts.What is your opinion?

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Reckless use by the
credit
card
 leads to
over limit
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 their
credit
card
although
 bank should do a centralized personal
credit
 history
check up
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check-up
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but
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i
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 think
this
 will not help the bank for the
people
 to repay their
credit
 balance. To the part of business development, banks
usally
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usually
 providing plenty of
card
 offers and a huge
credit
 balance to the
constumers
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consumers
therefore
 banks ought to execute new regulations and limitations for upcoming
costumers
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customers
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al
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as
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 well as verify the past account statements
atlest
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at least
 one year. nowadays
credit
 police and court cases rapidly increasing
thus
 to
absain
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abstain
obtain
 from
this
 some
people
 are migrating to another nation as well as few
people
 are facing the legal
consequances
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consequences
.
for
example
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 in the united
arab
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 emirates more
presantage
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percentage
 of
the
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prisoners are arrested due to
credit
card
debit
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debt
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 surge. Mainly
people
 use
credit
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a credit
the credit
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card
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cards
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 for their luxurious
life style
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lifestyle
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 it
is significantly get
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 larger
their
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than their
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card
 liabilities
also
 looking at the account stability, it would not
be sustain
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 longer
nevertheless
 can expect the fluctuation at any time. one of my
friennds
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friends
, he was a
millioner
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millionaire
 recently his
bussiness
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business
 got collapsed so
presntly
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presently
 he has many legal cases over the
credit
card
debit
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debt
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 in
dubai
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Dubai
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. in the conclusion,
my
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 opinion pre paid
card
 is the best solution for the banks rather than
credit
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a credit
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card
. the functionalities are online
purchase
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purchases
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anong
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along
 with
the
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apply
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local and international purchases.
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government
goverment
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 should establish a
credit
 bureau and bring all
bank
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banks
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undernath
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underneath
 it.
also
this
buraeu
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bureau
 look over all the transactions
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