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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
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belive
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believe
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 give prisoning
longer
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a longer
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time
 can diminish
crime
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the crime
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rate
.Other, folks
thinks
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think
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 there are more ways to decrease
crime
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the crime
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rate
.
Personally
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i
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 assume
second
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the second
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 position is better
this
 essay will discuss both views.
Majority
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 of people prefer long term lockup
than
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 looking up other options.Its
undoubtably
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undoubtedly
crime
 makers can do it again what he or she did it before.
Therefore
 public
afraid
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thus
 people and wanted to get rid of society for
longer
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a longer
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time
.
Furthermore
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 masses
thinks
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think
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 giving long
time
,
prisoner
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the prisoner
a prisoner
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 will think about his mistakes.
For example
 several prisoners after
in
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being in
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 jail,
starting
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tostarting
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 develop their behaviours
mind
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minds
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.
Thus
 people successfully back to society and lived their lives.
However
, giving
long
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a long
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time
 for all crimes give us some trouble
such
 as do violations again.
For instance
 past century just stealing suits gives 10 years to jail.
In
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 that
time
statiscally
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statistically
statically
crime
 was
in
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at
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higher
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a higher
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rate
because
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ofbecause
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 prisoners .
Besides
 jailing them more
instead
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ofinstead
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 work on prisoners talk with psychologists to change their views.
Moreover
 to reduce after
crime
 needs to improve living conditions.After the release give to
time
 job options and motivations
therefore
criminal
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criminals
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 changed
to
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into
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worthy
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the worthy
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citizen
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citizens
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.To exemplify countries of Norway
wich
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which
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 have lowest
crime
rate
 in the world. In conclusion, society needs to
undestand
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understand
 criminals are
a
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apply
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humans and can make mistakes.For
me
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,me
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i
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I
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 think
alternative
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an alternative
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 option
to
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is to
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 save and give them new life.In
long
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the long
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term
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,term
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crime
rate
 will drop and the world will become a safer place to live.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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