Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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belive
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believe
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give prisoning
longer
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a longer
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time
can diminish
crime
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the crime
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rate
.Other, folks
thinks
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there are more ways to decrease
crime
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rate
.
Personally
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i
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assume
second
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position is better
this
essay will discuss both views.
Majority
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of people prefer long term lockup
than
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looking up other options.Its
undoubtably
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undoubtedly
crime
makers can do it again what he or she did it before.
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public
afraid
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thus
people and wanted to get rid of society for
longer
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a longer
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time
.
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masses
thinks
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giving long
time
,
prisoner
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the prisoner
a prisoner
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will think about his mistakes.
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several prisoners after
in
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jail,
starting
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develop their behaviours
mind
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.
Thus
people successfully back to society and lived their lives.
However
, giving
long
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time
for all crimes give us some trouble
such
as do violations again.
For instance
past century just stealing suits gives 10 years to jail.
In
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that
time
statiscally
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statistically
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crime
was
in
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higher
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rate
because
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ofbecause
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prisoners .
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jailing them more
instead
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ofinstead
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work on prisoners talk with psychologists to change their views.
Moreover
to reduce after
crime
needs to improve living conditions.After the release give to
time
job options and motivations
therefore
criminal
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criminals
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changed
to
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worthy
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the worthy
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citizen
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citizens
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.To exemplify countries of Norway
wich
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which
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have lowest
crime
rate
in the world. In conclusion, society needs to
undestand
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understand
criminals are
a
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apply
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humans and can make mistakes.For
me
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i
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think
alternative
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an alternative
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option
to
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save and give them new life.In
long
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term
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crime
rate
will drop and the world will become a safer place to live.
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