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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centers while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

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There is a section of society who enjoys shopping in
local
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the local
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market
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markets
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,
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however
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 others do at shopping
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centers
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centres
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. The advantages of buying at
local
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the local
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 market
is
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exploration
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an exploration
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 and boosting local
econony
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economy
 and in case of
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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 is
hassle free
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 with multi outlets availability. I prefer shopping
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centers
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centres
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. The shopping experience at local markets
give
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opportunity
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 for exploration.As people can visit various stores and check out the products available and compare different features. The other reason is people boost their local GDP by purchasing objects from local vendors .
This
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 is well illustrated by Surat, that the textile city turned out to be one of the highest
tax
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taxpayer
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payer
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payers
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 in the country , having majority
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of
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local store owners as its
tax payer
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taxpayer
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. At shopping
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centers
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centres
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, it is far more convenient as all the products are available under one roof ,so it saves
lot
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 of time. The other reason is there are many outlets available so
,
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apply
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 if someone wants to return or exchange they didn't
to
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go to particular shop
instead
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 make a visit to the nearest
center
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centre
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 available. A recent study showed that the footfall at shopping
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centers
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centres
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 has increased by 38% as in busy life people want
hassle free
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hassle-free
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 shopping experience. I prefer shopping
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centers
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centres
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 as
variety
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a variety
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 of options
available
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are available
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 for selection at one place. It is
convinent
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convenient
 and
hassel
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hassle
Hassel
 free. To encapsulate, the foregoing discussions propounded the view that both
group
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 have their own opinion based on their experiences but my viewpoint has shown significance to me.
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