Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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TV
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shows and
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on PC are considered as a primary source of entertainment. There is a section of
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that believes the content of these mediums has become violent in today’s age, which has certainly impacted the peace in
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. I would argue that these elements do not significantly
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human behaviour in our
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.
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, individual who believes that
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on PC and
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shows are cruel might argue that these entertainment sources exhibit inhuman behaviour and would certainly increase the aggression level in
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, movies
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as Hostel and
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shows like Saw, are harsh for the
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-time viewer.
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, video
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of a new generation are nothing more than the organized platform for virtual crimes,
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as robberies, accidents and invading a region.
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, playing
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will be destructive for young minds.
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, my view is that Individual own choices make a huge
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in moulding his /her character.
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, educated person with strong will power and positive attitude are rarely impacted by the harmful activities in surrounding.
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, there are education programs on
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which are beneficial to school children.
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,
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on PC helps to boost brain power and improve strategic thinking. If the content of
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and
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were so destructive
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every viewer will be furious, but that’s not the case. In conclusion,
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and computer
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have become harsh to some extent
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and might
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society
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, but these factors are not creating any
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on self-determined and positive people. In my opinion, illiteracy and ignorance are responsible factors of aggression after watching the brutal content.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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