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Computers are being used more and more in education and some say there will be soon no role for teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #say #role #teachers
Nowadays technology is playing
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 significant role in the education system people believe that they can replace the
teachers
 in the coming generations.
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 disagree with
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 statement and in the following
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 I intend to divulge my opinion. It is
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undeniable
undesirable
 that
teachers
 have
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 major impact on the
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children's
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behavior
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 and their academic results.
furtermore
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furthermore
 in
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the classroom
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 students should learn how to be
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 which is only possible by having
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responsible teaching professional.in certain subjects it is difficult to get
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interest
 on them which by
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efficient teachers
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teachers
 they can create enthusiasm to learn having topics too.
for instance
,take a class full of kids and no teacher to control than they will do whatever they want to.
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 In
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 educational
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 will be
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intelligent
 and some mediocre students where they are slow in learning topics and they can always go to the teacher and clear their problems related to the studies.
however
,which is difficult to ask a system question and get the answer or explanation.
On the other hand
,it is inevitable that most of the institution
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 utilizing the computers in many ways.
this
 is because in the present generation many works are carried out by technology easily and accurately.
for example
,in the software department it is mandatory to have knowledge on the system coding which is essential to proceed the programs. To conclude,
teachers
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 on the
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 education
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 as in building up a good character
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 things cannot
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 from
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artificial intelligence.
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