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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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It is commonly known that some
people
work
 or study more intensive than their colleagues or classmates.
This
 essay will find out why
this
 is happening and whether it has a positive impact. One of the reasons that may make a separate group of
people
 do several times as much
work
 as others are that they have aims to achieve. Working hard requires a great deal of determination, and
the
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determination can be obtained by setting goals. For
this
reason
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people
 prefer hard labour to procrastination. These ones who want to immigrate to other countries in order to study abroad can illustrate hard-working
people
, as the immigration process requires a great deal of overwhelming
work
 and, of course, studies in other language-speaking
community
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communities
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 is a challenging activity. Despite all the
advantages
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 there are several drawbacks
in
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this
 kind of affair. Some
people
 are spending too much time on
this
, and,
therefore
, they are likely to harm their health. These
people
 concentrate only on their studies or
work
, and sometimes they don't have time to go out
on
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 the fresh air, they can even forget to eat
anf
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and
this
 results in the lack of vitamins in the organism, which is highly harmful. An example of
these
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kinf
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kind
kinds
 of
people
 can be
I
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myself. I didn't realize what can be
results
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the results
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 of
this
 occupation
until
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were until
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i
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I
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 was told by several times that I look
unhelathy
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unhealthy
healthy
. In conclusion, some
people
are tend
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 to overdo their job or studies due to their motive to reach their goals, which
frequantly
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frequently
 cause serious consequences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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