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in the future, it seems more difficult to live on the earth. some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live, such as mars. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Disagree- Invest in biofuels restore forest lands- preserve jungles rain forests habitat clean water bodies reduce contamination toxins pollutants recycle reuse reduce consumerism awareness of consequences of our actions plastic pollution landfills animal farming for meat consumption Mars far solution until
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 complicated to travel commercially for many expensive only billionaires can afford not enough development research is underway huge investment for facilities to accommodate Feed human With the rate climatic conditions are declining on the Earth, it is highly likely that it would become inhospitable in future. Until drastic measures are not taken to restore what has been lost, other plants with possibilities of life should be explored. Many people believe that investments made in the research of these alternative plants is a forward-looking approach which could be immensely beneficial when the need arises.
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, there is another group of people that votes against it, and to a moderate degree, I agree with that mindset. Those in favour argue that exploring the universe in the quest to find a place other than Earth that we can consider a second home is highly important. There will come a time when the circumstances to live would be unfavourable on the blue planet, and funding the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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