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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.

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Although
 it is sometimes thought the best way to reduce
crime
 is to give
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longer
prison
sentence
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, Other
people
 believe that there are better
ways
 by which
crime
 can be reduced. I consider that there are far better
ways
 to reduce
crime
 than giving longer
prison
sentences
. On the one ,handsome
people
 believe that there are better alternative
ways
 of reducing
crime
 than giving longer
prison
sentences
 and I agree. Businesses should be sent to rehab or given counselling sessions.
This
 will not only help them to settle their minds but
also
 focus on themselves and their future. Providing them education and upskilling them will
further
 help them uplifting their spirits. They will start thinking of opportunities to work outside the
prison
. Helping them in getting work or jobs will
further
 change their mindset and they will start thinking of leading a normal life rather than a criminal one.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that giving longer
prison
sentences
 is the best way to reduce
crime
. Longer
prison
sentences
 can be very tough on your mental health. Living in
prison
 is not easy due to its strict rules and regulations.
Thus
 it can easily affect your mental health.
People
 tend to go into depression while they are serving longer jail time. You need to be physically and mentally very strong in order to serve a longer time in
prison
. The atmosphere of
prison
 is
such
 that if you serve a long time there, the chances of becoming a normal person decreases. There are chances that you will become more criminal minded. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their opinions, I think there are better
ways
 to reduce crimes than giving longer
prison
sentences
.
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