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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#country #language
In the era of globalization, people have moved
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overseas to pursue better living environments. It is often argued that being an inhabitant in an overseas speaking state can develop severe social awkwardness and practical difficulties. I totally agree with
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obstacles in person’s life. To embark on, the majority of people face notable problems in their daily as they do not know the local language. The foremost problem is that they face difficulty while communicating with local masses which affects their work and daily tasks.
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shopping centres , grocery shops etc. and it will lead to
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irritability
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, in China, most of the instructions are written in their own native language which makes it immensely difficult for others.
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 and lead to depression. If someone has to carry out some sort of official work in the local government offices or bank institutes, it causes utmost difficulty to the masses since they are not able to convey and express their thoughts to the other human beings and
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 able to follow instructions.
Furthermore
, students encounter tough times in understanding their lectures and speeches while studying in the college and it
affects
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their
study
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, in colleges, scholars tend to ignore their mates coming from different states and continue speaking in their mother tongue, making it difficult for newcomers to interact with others. To recapitulate, in my opinion, one should know how to speak a foreign language
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 it will lead to repercussions emotionally and financially as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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