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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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One question that has caused a lot of controversies
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 year is that people have more
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 than in the past.In my opinion, having
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 variety of
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 will make people's life
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 and it includes both positive and negative ones. On the one hand, thanks to the development of technology, there are many options that enrich life. Having many options will help you buy the necessary and suitable items for yourself.
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, when going shopping, people can choose to buy online
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 of going to buy in person, saving more
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, and at the same
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 being proactive in buying necessary appliances.
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, there are
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 some disadvantages of having many
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. Having too many
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 can make us feel uncertain about what we should choose, leading to a loss of
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. If we had only one option, we wouldn't have to compare two different things and we could directly come to a conclusion about what we should get.
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 way we can save a lot of our precious
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 that we can use to do other things. In conclusion, I believe that even though our lives could be much better, more convenient and more comfortable if we had many options, we can still waste
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 choosing while there is still too much to do
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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