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Some people believe that women should be able to join their country's army and police forces, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion, including examples from your knowledge and experience.

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Women
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's are the greatest blessing from God and they are capable of doing all sorts of suitable employment if they wish and will but working or taking the responsibility of
army
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 or
police
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department
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 job is a challenging task in our society. Most of the individuals prefer the
women
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 to join in the
police
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 and
army
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 career line while another side of members
is quite disagree
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 with
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 including me. In
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 ,essay
i
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 will explain both sides of perspectives with strong examples.
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, they are a lot of advantages for the
women
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 who join in
army
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department
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.
Women
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 can be the role model to the society female group and they can prove that
women
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 are as strong as men and can handle every job with responsibility.
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, one of my friend aunts is a deputy commissioner in the
police
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department
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 and she is passionate about her
work
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 by holding alternative responsibilities she will be doing her
work
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 actively and ready to catch junkies very bravely .
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, it makes our female gender so energetic and sees the dream to serve our country honestly by watching these powerful confident ladies. Whereas, critics claim that
women
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 are not suitable for the responsible
army
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police
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 forces job. They think that
women
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 are so weak in
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 matter and hold the conception that males are the best to
work
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 in
police
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 forces.
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, individuals tend to state that
women
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 who join the
army
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 are not responsible for their personal life and household preference is lacking. Children are missing mother love, the spouse cannot have a
comfort
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 married life as
women
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 always away from home and in terms of
health
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women
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 are sensitive so they will be ill if they do
army
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 kind of jobs because in these the training tough and hard as females body parts so fragile. So,
women
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 if they
work
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 in the
police
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department
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 face these sorts of drawbacks. To conclude, everything in life which we think is important will consist of pros and cons and in
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 matter cons outweigh its pros.
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,
women
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 should take the responsibilities of their children and home as well as their partner whereas
army
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police
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 jobs are not capable for them I believe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Diversity and inclusion
  • Talent pool
  • Physical strength and endurance
  • Unit cohesion
  • Morale
  • Effectiveness
  • Training and support structures
  • Critics
  • Unique skills and perspectives
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